炉边闲咏(续三）

仰斋

<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 15pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-char-indent-count: 1.5; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">炉边闲咏（续三）</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span>秃笔</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">塾中初习字，挥墨乱翻江。每变三花脸，时睃百叶窗。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">可怜毛已秃，失笑气难降。思觅还童术，嬉游吾旧邦。<p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">电灯<p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">灿然辉四壁，顾我乱涂鸦。书辨蝇头字，香分雀舌茶。<p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">岂犹流热泪，亦不结幽花。却笑窗前月，空临士子家。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p>

草啸

<p>其一之结，见情趣。之四，孤平？</p><p>其二喜首联。岂犹句，比拟蜡烛，稍觉突兀。</p>

红叶

仰老最近偏爱五律呀，赏同草头。

东华人氏

也觉得岂犹一句可酌。

剑尘

<p>仰老此二律似略逊于前作</p>

皎月

仰老近来笔耕甚勤，敬佩！

向闲

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仰斋

<p>谢草兄指疵。这两句都不好拟改为每变三花脸，时睃百叶窗。电灯那两句，一丝是不用蜡烛和清油灯，也借作衬托。</p><p>回红叶，05年我写过《闲居杂咏》五律21首，现在没那么大的劲头，写不了那么多，也没那么快。</p><p>剑尘说的不错。越写越流了吧。</p><p>回皎月，我那是什么勤，消闲罢了。</p><p>谢向兄，我是那么个意思，不一定好。</p>

一得愚生

仰老法古而不泥 堪為後學典範

瀚海胡杨

<p>问候仰老!</p><p>大作拜读!最喜其二!</p>