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风露中宵

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">夜得闲</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">听歌偶感</span><font face="Times New Roman"><br/></font><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">作者：一介酸丁</span><span lang="EN-US"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;"><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp; </font></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US"><p><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman"></font></span></p></span></p><p><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman"></font></span></p><p></p><p><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman"></font></span></p><p></p><p><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman"></font></span></p><p></p><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">细雨千千阕</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">流年淡淡尝</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><p></p><p><span lang="EN-US"></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">如歌偏变老</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">似梦却经霜</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></p><p><span lang="EN-US"></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">已惯山丘远</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">还伤木叶黄</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">随风诗伴酒</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">况味不知凉</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US"></span></p><p></p><p><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">简析：</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">&nbsp;&nbsp; </span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">首联颇类唐冯延巳的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">&lt;</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">南乡子</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">&gt;</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">：“细雨湿流光，芳草年年与恨长”</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">的意境。一种淡淡的愁怅迷漫于丝丝细雨中，以景入情，情由景生，可谓善得诗法。淡淡尝，一个尝字，将岁月流逝中复杂的况味婉转道出。亦与辛弃疾：“可惜流年，忧愁风雨，树犹如此”机杼相似。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">&nbsp;&nbsp; 嫁轩是慨叹年华渐逝，功业不就，风雨逗人愁绪，复引桓温金城见十年前所植之柳，粗已成围，不禁叹曰：“树犹如此，人何以堪”的典故，感慨人生之短，世事沧桑变化之速。作者在三联对句“还伤木叶黄”，亦是暗寓着这层意思。岁月迁逝之感，古今同一。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">&nbsp;&nbsp; </span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">当年宋玉咏：“洞庭波兮木叶下”，悲秋之情溢于言表。今作者伤黄叶飘落，亦是借前人酒杯浇自家块磊。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">&nbsp;&nbsp; 二联：“如歌偏变老，似梦却经霜。”</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">时下</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">一首流行歌曲：我能想到最浪漫的事，就是和你一起慢慢变老，作者盖化用此意乎？与相爱的人偕老，得偿所愿，可以无憾也。或寓对往事旧情之追忆。“似梦却经霜”可见梦之凄寒，心境之凄恻。此联诗意稍隐晦迷朦。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">&nbsp;&nbsp; 再观三联：“已惯山丘远</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">还伤木叶黄。”陶渊明的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">&lt;</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">归园田居</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">&gt;</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">一：“少无适俗韵</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">性本爱丘山。”作者隐然以陶元亮为同调，不惯世俗之纷扰，而心醉于田园之静美，山丘之幽雅。此处似流露出作者的隐逸之怀。然对句一伤字，却又似矛盾。作者于秋叶凋零，节气更迭不能无所挂怀。故可知虽有隐者之志，终不能学太上忘情，或身在江湖，心在魏阙乎？</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">&nbsp;&nbsp; 结联直抒怀抱，诗意显霍。“随风诗伴酒</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">况味不知凉”，作者当把酒临风时，逸兴遄飞，宠辱皆忘，世态之炎凉早抛诸九宵云外。黄山谷有诗：“清风明月无人管，并作南楼一味凉”。此时脱却尘网，遗世独立，飘飘乎几欲羽化登仙。岂不令人称羡？</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p><p></p><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p>请诸友斧正。诗如何？评得如何？

殊熠在天

<p>诗不错，赏析文字挺到位。</p><p>但还是得批评一下，首联两句明显是不算狠通的，完全是被中宵兄解通的。</p><p>细雨千千阕，这个句子怎么看都是问题句。流年淡淡尝要稍好些，</p>

风露中宵

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>殊熠在天</i>在2008-8-2 0:11:56的发言：</b><br/><p>诗不错，赏析文字挺到位。</p><p>但还是得批评一下，首联两句明显是不算狠通的，完全是被中宵兄解通的。</p><p>细雨千千阕，这个句子怎么看都是问题句。流年淡淡尝要稍好些，</p></div><p>谢殊兄指正。</p>