七夕捌一箇

萧散

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草啸

读来感觉不顺。

萧散

谢过草啸兄.弟作惯以粤语念之.兄读来觉不顺,应是此诗用韵之故.

梅岭野人

<p>读着偶不觉有啥问题，而且诗意挺好。</p><p>只是归期只怕不太合适。两星鹊桥相会之日怎么可算是归期呢？少游词中呼作佳期。而相别时乃忍顾鹊桥归路也。</p><br/>

剑尘

附议小鼠

萧散

谢鼠兄、剑兄.牛郎无论怎么说都是附马爷嘛，故这赶回天上，自是归去了。以上说笑，鼠兄的分析很是有理。