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皎月

<p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="5">赠徐教五先生</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;"><p><font size="5"></font></p></span></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="5">万里鸿传岛上秋，人扶鸠杖海东头。</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;"><p><font size="5"></font></p></span></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="5">神州梦与春烟隔，玉玦泪凭风袖收。</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;"><p><font size="5"></font></p></span></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="5">每顾苍茫皆异土，但工感慨即乡愁。<br/><br/></font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font size="5">遥山千叠斜阳外，一棹能回彼岸不？<br/><br/><br/>读史<br/></font><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p></span></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"><font color="#284755" size="5">山因云势削崔嵬，七伐寒原剩劫灰。</font></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"><font color="#284755" size="5">日月犹悬秦镜影，春秋空续鲁麟哀。</font></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"><font color="#284755" size="5">何堪浊世翻棋局，忍指长庚哭帝台。</font></p><p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font size="5">风雨鸡鸣多永夜，乾坤莽莽待雄才。</font></span></p><br/><br/><br/>

叶子

每读你的诗都无任钦佩，非止水先生是你忠实粉丝，俺也早是你粉丝拉~[em04]

风露中宵

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>皎月</i>在2008-12-27 17:05:52的发言：</b><br/><p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="5">赠徐教五先生</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;"><p><font size="5"></font></p></span></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="5">万里鸿传岛上秋，人扶鸠杖海东头。</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;"><p><font size="5"></font></p></span></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="5">神州梦与春烟隔，玉玦泪凭风袖收。</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;"><p><font size="5"></font></p></span></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p><font size="5"></font></p><p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="5">每顾苍茫皆异土，但工感慨即乡愁。<br/><br/></font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font size="5">遥山千叠斜阳外，一棹能回彼岸不？<br/><br/><br/>读史<br/></font><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p></span></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"><font color="#284755" size="5">山因云势削崔嵬，七伐寒原剩劫灰。</font></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"><font color="#284755" size="5">日月犹悬秦镜影，春秋空续鲁麟哀。</font></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white;"><font color="#284755" size="5">何堪浊世翻棋局，忍指长庚哭帝台。</font></p><p class="MsoBodyText" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font size="5">风雨鸡鸣多永夜，乾坤莽莽待雄才。</font></span></p><br/><br/><br/><br/></div><p></p>两首用典颇多,但二律俱沉郁.入清人顾屈陈集中可乱楮叶.学习.

一得愚生

其一別有蘊意 其二略泛 己意不伸

云海

其一意境苍茫，为赠答之佳作。其二作为读史诗，愚意还是独咏某人或某事易为措手，似此通写易流于泛。故一得兄之言是也。君此诗，偏重于读。

云海

其一意境苍茫，为赠答之佳作。其二作为读史诗，愚意还是独咏某人或某事易为措手，似此通写易流于泛。故一得兄之言是也。君此诗，偏重于读。

柳梦无痕

<p>诗、评一并学习：）</p>

殊熠在天

<p>语慷慨而意遥深。</p><p>元旦快乐！</p>

红叶

皎月新年快乐！其一已拜读过，也更喜，3句尤其好。

皎月

谢诸位师友点评,先生与云海兄所言极是.