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青青子佩

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">江南梅萼若当初，</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">一度春风两地书。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">别后青山还似旧，</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">归来紫燕更愁予。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">屐痕过处情难老，</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">诗句吟成意转疏。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">坐看三更帘外雨，</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">侵怀往事忆何如。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p>

鄱湖渔歌

<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">喜首联.什么时间偶也弄只屐来穿穿.</span></p>

卷葹

<p>子佩七律日见老练。</p><p>末韵想是敲键出误，应是“何如”哦。</p><p>要吹毛的话，“若”字与“似”字意复，可酌改首句。</p><p>三更雨是看不清的，可换听，此字平仄两读。或者干脆说“滴尽”。</p>

阿咸

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">屐痕过处情难老，<span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">诗句吟成意转疏。</span></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;">赏此联．觉中２联意近．&nbsp;<p></p></span></p><p></p>

青青子佩

<p>多谢指点</p><p>回段先生,是打错,嘻嘻,半夜发贴,错误是难免滴啦~~~~~</p><p>首句偶最喜欢啦,舍不得改[em04]</p><p>七句改"听尽三更帘外雨"</p>

浔阳倦客

<p>呵呵，春风一度，够坦白的哈</p><p>燕子归来你愁什么哈</p>

剑尘

<span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">别后青山频念远<img title="dvubb" alt="图片点击可在新窗口打开查看" src="http://jiangyouss.com/Skins/Default/emot/em04.gif" align="middle" border="0"/></span>

青青子佩

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>浔阳倦客</i>在2007-3-18 22:07:06的发言：</b><br/><p>呵呵，春风一度，够坦白的哈</p><p>燕子归来你愁什么哈</p></div><p></p><p>天哪,偶才发现倦MM是江右第一聪明人[em05]</p><p></p>

青青子佩

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>剑尘</i>在2007-3-18 22:08:36的发言：</b><br/><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">别后青山频念远<img title="dvubb" alt="图片点击可在新窗口打开查看" src="http://jiangyouss.com/Skins/Default/emot/em04.gif" align="middle" border="0"/></span></div><p></p><p>多谢出手哈,</p><p>8过偶觉得味道变了.[em04]</p>

三水

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">别后青山还似旧，</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">归来紫燕更愁予。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt;">
                        <p>--诗风甚稳</p></span></p><p>--诗风甚稳</p>