也交三月作业

白云飞

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;"><font color="#719966">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; （旧作，凑一下数）<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">莺飞绿满田，老树岂春眠？</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">仰看残枝上，欣然叶向天。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"></font></span>&nbsp;</p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"></font></span></b>&nbsp;</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;鹏城春游</font></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"></span></b><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966" size="2"></font></span>&nbsp;</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966" size="2">岁末，妻儿来莞相聚，念及小女久慕大海之情，于正月初二携全家游小梅沙。谨以此记之。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"></font></span>&nbsp;</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">户外东风日日轻，携家好向海边行。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">小梅沙上比肩影，欢乐谷中儿女情。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">快艇如梭穿白浪，飞人似隼逐蓝鲸。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">千般意气此时发，不觉相思别后生。<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; ---2007-03-18 </span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"></span></font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"></font></span></span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"></font></span></span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">注：小梅沙，地名，鹏城八景之一，有“黄金海岸”之称。欢乐谷，深圳地名，人造景观，游乐园。<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span></font></span></span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"></span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"></span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"></span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"></span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"></span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"><span lang="EN-US"></span></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"><font color="#ff00ff">改动一下三联：</font><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p></span></span></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#ff00ff">户外东风逐日轻，携家好向海边行。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#ff00ff">小梅沙上比肩影，欢乐谷中儿女情。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#ff00ff">快艇如梭穿叠浪，飞人似隼瞰鹏城。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#ff00ff">千般意气此时发，不觉相思别后生。</font><span lang="EN-US"><br/></span></span><font color="#ff00ff">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; ---2007-05-02&nbsp;</font></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><font color="#ff00ff"></font></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><font color="#ff00ff">(颈联没改好，暂存......)</font></p></span><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"></font></span></b>&nbsp;</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"></font></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"></font></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">捣练子</font></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966"></font></span></b>&nbsp;</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"></span></b><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#719966">桃带笑，</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#719966">杏含春。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#719966">莺燕声声频唤门。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#719966">梦里那人今又见。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#719966">细腰新着绿罗裙。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#719966"></font></span>&nbsp;</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#719966"></font></span>&nbsp;</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#719966">****顺便讨伐一下雪师姐：出了三种体裁让偶们做，害偶东拼西凑...</font></span>[em03][em09]</p></span></span><p><br/>小梅沙的浪<br/></p><p>小梅沙的人<br/><br/><br/></p><br/><br/><br/>

素心若雪

我也写不出。。。

潇湘寻梦

<span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">千般意气此时发，不觉相思别后生。</font></span>

素心若雪

<p>很漂亮的海滩呀～</p>

潇湘寻梦

先前只注意诗，忘记看海了。再看看。呵呵

江右门卫

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">绝句颇不好,且是旧作,不如米洗掉重做;词尚可.刀子下在七律:<br/>户外东风日日轻，携家好向海边行。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">小梅沙上比肩影，欢乐谷中儿女情。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">快艇如梭穿白浪，飞人似隼逐蓝鲸。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">千般意气此时发，不觉相思别后生。<br/>观图片上的浪,可不象是轻风,可换个角度.二联对仗欠工,天下转成繁体的版面还错了一个"谷"字,山谷的谷同简体.三联合掌,可以考虑写成流水对.尾联到是好句,然忽然言别太过突兀,前面缺少过渡.不过总体来开句子顺畅许多,谋篇亦略有板眼.<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span></font></span></p>

一得愚生

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">绝句颇不好,且是旧作,不如米洗掉重做;词尚可.刀子下在七律:<br/>户外东风日日轻，携家好向海边行。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">小梅沙上比肩影，欢乐谷中儿女情。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">快艇如梭穿白浪，飞人似隼逐蓝鲸。</font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font color="#719966">千般意气此时发，不觉相思别后生。<br/>观图片上的浪,可不象是轻风,可换个角度.二联对仗欠工,天下转成繁体的版面还错了一个"谷"字,山谷的谷同简体.三联合掌,可以考虑写成流水对.尾联到是好句,惟此处言别太过突兀,前面缺少过渡.不过总体来开句子顺畅许多,谋篇亦略有板眼.<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span></font></span></p>

渔唱起三更

<p>点评的仔细，学习下。</p>