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临川沐风

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二十八刀

<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体;">不寐</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>不寐犹支枕，看移当户星。幽微来远想，淼漫起真听。</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><font face="楷体_GB2312"><font size="4"><strong>风细心尘绝，夜深诗触灵。四厢花影睡，飞露下中庭。</strong></font></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"></font></strong></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4">这一首，大好，欣赏，非常喜欢。<br/>但第六句的“诗触”二字，与其出句相效，炼的稍过；第七句“四厢”二字则嫌落实。在下孔见。</font></strong></span></p>

饕庵

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>張蒼烈</i>在2007-6-4 12:58:03的发言：</b><br/><p>无树镜无台，莲花子夜开。眉心空自赏，梦语只天猜。</p><p>栩栩衣犹湿，沄沄海亦灰。娲皇哭秋漏，万斛泻沉雷。</p><p></p></div><p>栩栩衣犹湿，沄沄海亦灰。--此成何语？</p>

張蒼烈

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>饕庵</i>在2007-6-6 1:26:06的发言：</b><br/><p>栩栩衣犹湿，沄沄海亦灰。--此成何语？</p></div><p>當然詩語，不然為何？</p>