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发表于 2007-8-21 16:32:29 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
<span lang="EN-US"></span><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"></p><p></p><p><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">一梦双星照海涯,醒来何处觅光华。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">纵然附骥朝前赶,只许牵牛向上爬。</span></p><p><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">迎贵妇,谒天衙,凡夫从此变仙家。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">人间也有深情者,不及银河两粒沙。</span></p><p></p>
发表于 2007-8-21 16:42:43 | 显示全部楼层
立意奇特 惟语句去词稍远
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发表于 2007-8-21 17:46:27 | 显示全部楼层
亦佳,惟不及另一首。
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发表于 2007-8-21 20:32:29 | 显示全部楼层
<p>深切认同楼上诸位。尤3,4,8句需要改造面目:)</p>
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