[原创]奔月

弘云居士

<span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; mso-bidi-font-family: tahoma;"><font face="宋体"></font><br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-bidi-font-family:tahoma;">嫦娥一啸向天奔，广袖纤纤拂故园。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; mso-bidi-font-family: tahoma;"><br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-bidi-font-family:tahoma;">探险非同皮尔瑞，究奇堪比麦哲伦。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; mso-bidi-font-family: tahoma;"><br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-bidi-font-family:tahoma;">遨游寰宇展雄志，环绕蟾宫壮国魂。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; mso-bidi-font-family: tahoma;"><br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-bidi-font-family:tahoma;">来日星河覆秋水，同舟共楫月球村。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; mso-bidi-font-family: tahoma;"><br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">注：皮尔瑞：最早到达北极的探险家。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><font face="Times New Roman"><br/>&nbsp;</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">麦哲伦：</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">1519</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">年进行了第一次环球航行。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><br/></span><br/>

林晚晴

辑字应是楫字误吧。扣着嫦娥号奔月，科学探险的事写……也是有心了的。

向闲

哲字出律，广寒宫简作寒宫不妥与寰宇亦不好属对，辑字意思不明。

草啸

中二联，有点老干的说。[em01]

虔青草

颔联似有些合掌了。

弘云居士

<p>麦哲伦特定词汇，感可不依平仄，辑本楫，笔误，寒改蟾如何，，？</p><p>谢向兄，刘老草兄林兄等指教，问好~</p><p><br/></p>