春山應江右月課調寄憶王孫

一得愚生

<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW;">東風濕點小梅妝。何處螺鬟碧渺茫。一抹煙拖綺影長。那堪望。若個愁人想玉郎。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><br/></span><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW;">擬改作：</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW;">東風濕點小梅妝。何處螺鬟碧渺茫。一抹煙拖綺影長。那堪望。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">似</span><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW;">個</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">人</span><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW;">人想玉郎。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p>

湘东诗苑

难得见到一得兄这类多情作品。

紫藤

<p>很喜欢这点味!</p>

一得愚生

谢冷嫂 湘兄

红叶

这个味道确实不多见：）

颖庐

春山，美人眉黛也。翻以眉黛写春山，拟人拟山，相得益彰。出人意表，语言本色，“<font face="宋体">那堪望。<span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: arial;">似</span></font><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: arial; mso-fareast-language: zh-tw;">個</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: arial;">人</span><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: arial; mso-fareast-language: zh-tw;">人想玉郎”——改后绝妙！</span>

林清晓

庚兄如此风格是真不多见：）