找回密码
 注册
搜索
查看: 926|回复: 5

[原创]小重山 稍作修改:)

[复制链接]
发表于 2008-4-28 09:21:25 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>又是匆匆春去时,</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>问花花不语,</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>怨归迟。</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>挽风独立画桥西,</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>青山外,</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>隐隐杜鹃啼。</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>&nbsp;</strong></font><p><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong></strong></font></p></span></p><p><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong></strong></font></p><p></p><p><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong></strong></font></p><p></p><p><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong></strong></font></p><p></p><p><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong></strong></font></p><p><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong></strong></font></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>欲效稼轩为,</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>纶巾衣似雪,</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>负蛾眉。</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>如今白发胜青丝,</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4">韶光里,</font></strong></span></p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>谁念少年痴。</strong></font></span><br/><br/><br/>
发表于 2008-4-28 17:16:58 | 显示全部楼层
<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>晚吹独立,音上可商。<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>纶巾衣,义上可商。</strong></font></span></strong></font></span>
回复

使用道具 举报

发表于 2008-4-29 01:29:33 | 显示全部楼层
<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>欲效稼轩为.此处存疑.整体略欠流畅,余同向兄.乱说哈</strong></font></span>[em04]
回复

使用道具 举报

 楼主| 发表于 2008-4-29 08:35:28 | 显示全部楼层
<p>谢二位行家赐教。</p><p><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>晚吹</strong>——<strong>若用晚,则[吹]字处用阳平则音协,一时未炼得适字而又惜音害义。“<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4">纶巾、衣满雪”非“<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4">纶巾衣、满雪</font></span>”“衣满雪”指素衣,恐误,今改之“衣似雪”如何?此二物皆代指书生。</font></span></strong></font></span></p><p><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">“<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>欲效稼轩为</strong></font></span>”本试效仿<font face="楷体_GB2312">稼轩抱负,故而下面则有“<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="4"><strong>纶巾衣似雪</strong></font></span>”先学本领之句。</font></span></strong></font></span></p>[em46][em46][em46]
回复

使用道具 举报

发表于 2008-4-29 09:25:37 | 显示全部楼层
<p>似觉得上下片内容不够同意,有点隔断感。</p>
回复

使用道具 举报

发表于 2008-4-29 09:29:09 | 显示全部楼层
<p>也是感觉"纶巾衣"处存疑,</p>
回复

使用道具 举报

您需要登录后才可以回帖 登录 | 注册

本版积分规则

Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|江右诗社 ( 苏ICP备11024144 )

GMT+8, 2024-11-26 05:37 , Processed in 0.015036 second(s), 17 queries .

Powered by Discuz! X3.5

© 2001-2024 Discuz! Team.

快速回复 返回顶部 返回列表