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叶子

<p class="articleContent"><b><font style="FONT-SIZE: 18px;">无题</font></b></p><p class="articleContent"><font style="FONT-SIZE: 18px;">当年一诺别无音，鹤去台空枉自寻。有梦已然翻百劫，吞声依旧湿重衾。</font></p><div class="articleContent"><font style="FONT-SIZE: 18px;">菱荷枯折风涛急，河汉奔流星斗沉。兀坐斋心情独种，春来和月拨幽琴。</font></div><div class="articleContent"><div class="articleContent"><p><b><font style="FONT-SIZE: 18px;">即事书怀</font></b></p><p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 18px;">荡涤胸怀且向山，何羁尘俗负秋颜。吹箫踏叶幽寻去，弄影簪花带露还。</font></p><p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 18px;">采摘无多忧足解，行歌少问性萧闲。营营生众凭喧聒，心不沉埋自有天。</font></p></div></div>

浔阳倦客

<p>一首沉痛</p><p>二首三联不很解&nbsp; 后三字怎么对的呢&nbsp; 结的不错</p><p>叶子mm律长进很大&nbsp;&nbsp; 拥抱鼓励一下先：）））））</p>

惜梦缘

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>浔阳倦客</i>在2009-9-2 11:28:54的发言：</b><br/><p>一首沉痛</p><p>二首三联不很解&nbsp; 后三字怎么对的呢&nbsp; 结的不错</p><p>叶子mm律长进很大&nbsp;&nbsp; 拥抱鼓励一下先：）））））</p></div><p>好象九江还欠着一个吧!嘻嘻!</p>

惜梦缘

<font size="4">兀坐斋心情独种，春来和月拨幽琴。好喜欢!</font>

和轩

<p>叶子好诗，渐入于厚矣。幽寻似不如直接用寻幽对仗更工，生众可有所本？</p><p></p>

东华人氏

<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">临屏步和叶子</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">一、</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">幽林月白鸟无音，旧梦依稀何处寻。<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">万古楼台皆在水，一帘秋雨又寒衾。<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">佳期未赴香桃瘦，锦字难书鱼雁沉。<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">最是桐声闻不得，呜呜好似断弦琴。<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">二、</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">读经何必入深山、息影江湖自养颜。<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">俗念当由流水去，全真可共老牛还。<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">青衫落落无谁厌，白鹤悠悠终日闲。<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">莫笑愚翁狂自大，宽怀足以胜青天。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #222222; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></p>

叶子

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>浔阳倦客</i>在2009-9-2 11:28:54的发言：</b><br/><p>一首沉痛</p><p>二首三联不很解&nbsp; 后三字怎么对的呢&nbsp; 结的不错</p><p>叶子mm律长进很大&nbsp;&nbsp; 拥抱鼓励一下先：）））））</p></div><p></p><p>先感谢可人儿兄的鼓励呀：）</p><p>后三字：性对忧当无问题吧，萧闲/足解皆是偏正词，应可对的。出句意思想必明白，行歌少问性萧闲——意思是尽管行歌少有人问而我本性却是萧闲，暗含自得其乐意。</p>

叶子

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>天堂有鸟</i>在2009-9-2 12:23:22的发言：</b><br/><p>一情真</p><p>二豁达</p></div><p></p>感谢天堂兄雅评！问好！

叶子

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>惜梦缘</i>在2009-9-3 10:26:18的发言：</b><br/><font size="4">兀坐斋心情独种，春来和月拨幽琴。好喜欢!</font></div><p></p>谢MM喜欢~呵呵，啥时欠他一个呢？：））

叶子

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>和轩</i>在2009-9-3 11:16:16的发言：</b><br/><p>叶子好诗，渐入于厚矣。幽寻似不如直接用寻幽对仗更工，生众可有所本？</p><p></p></div><p></p><p>诗要浑厚，词要婉曲一直是我努力的方向，惜功力不逮，遥遥难遂！</p><p>幽寻掉过来固然工对，这样读起来感觉更顺，也算错对吧。</p><p>生众可有所本？----生众一词我本不记得本自哪里，但“芸芸众生”是可以颠倒为“芸芸生众”的，你提出来我就搜了一搜，举个前人诗词：</p><p class="poetry"><a href="http://www.haoshici.com/Weiyingwu16303.html" target="_top">答崔主簿問，兼簡溫上人</a>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 唐&nbsp; 韦应物</p><p class="poetry">缘情生众累，晚悟依道流。诸境一已寂，了将身世浮。<br/>闲居澹无味，忽复四时周。靡靡芳草积，稍稍新篁抽。<br/>即此抱馀素，块然诚寡俦。自适一忻意，愧蒙君子忧。</p><p class="poetry"><br/></p>