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<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>一得愚生</i>在2007-7-5 7:40:53的发言：</b><br/><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">欲坐禪関不似僧，況兼暑氣苦相蒸。</span><span lang="EN-US"><br/></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">無人可語憐長夜，有夢難成搔短鬙。</span><span lang="EN-US"><br/></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">些許清涼疑作雨，翻飛蝙蝠認爲朋。</span><span lang="EN-US"><br/></span><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW;">忽看明月蹣跚上，</span><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW;">大好乾坤仰一燈。</span></p></span><br/><br/></div><p></p><p></p><p>全诗前半孤寂景况,后半郁垒情怀.全诗要紧在"<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">些許清涼疑作雨，翻飛蝙蝠認爲朋",而此联紧要正在"認爲"二字;"翻飛蝙蝠認爲朋",大有独臂擎天之力.结句,在五、六句“郁垒”结时，倏然一荡，胸怀自然阔开，所谓“结而能开”是也，然心中“郁垒”终得开乎？</span></p>

诗心云意

<span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: zh-tw;">“忽看明月蹣跚上，</span><span lang="ZH-TW" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: zh-tw;">大好乾坤仰一燈。”前句好，后句读着似觉不顺口。一得老师，诗心这里乱说，得罪了。</span><br/>

风过苍筠

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>燕山燕</i>在2007-7-9 7:55:17的发言：</b><br/><p></p><p></p><p>全诗前半孤寂景况,后半郁垒情怀.全诗要紧在"<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';">些許清涼疑作雨，翻飛蝙蝠認爲朋",而此联紧要正在"認爲"二字;"翻飛蝙蝠認爲朋",大有独臂擎天之力.结句,在五、六句“郁垒”结时，倏然一荡，胸怀自然阔开，所谓“结而能开”是也，然心中“郁垒”终得开乎？</span></p></div><p></p>雨如解的好！但是尾联只恐怕也不能是只作字面解的吧？

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