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[原创]高阳台 丁亥清明

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发表于 2007-4-14 16:27:37 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
<p>高阳台&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;丁亥清明</p><p>风拂池波<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,</span>鸟鸣庭树<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,</span>寻幽又到山家<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">。</span>白鹭低飞<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,</span>秧田已露新芽<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">。</span>断红空逐清溪远<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,</span>对桃枝<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">、</span>枉自长嗟<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">。</span>念前尘<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">、翠</span>陌留连<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,</span>独赏桐花<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">。</span>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 胡杨林里游人散<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,</span>叹云追逝水<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,</span>日送归鸦<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">。</span>旧约无凭<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,</span>谁教梦绕龙沙<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">?芳</span>春可待成秋色<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,怯</span>窗阴<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">、</span>暗换年华<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">。</span>渐黄昏<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">、</span>乱絮蒙蒙<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">,</span>飘向天涯<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;;">。</span></p>
发表于 2007-4-14 16:42:53 | 显示全部楼层
<p>明朝春去成秋色<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;;;">,</span>更窗前<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;;;">、</span>暗换年华~~~~~</p><p>这远见,,,,,比偶强多了哈,偶只想到了夏天[em31]</p><p>玩笑啦,不许生气[em12]</p>
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发表于 2007-4-14 18:59:12 | 显示全部楼层
断红空逐溪流远 覺“斷、空”二処用力稍大,與前境不諧。
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 楼主| 发表于 2007-4-14 23:55:21 | 显示全部楼层
<p>多谢子佩兄赐评!</p><p>拙作已做了改动.</p>
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 楼主| 发表于 2007-4-15 00:06:42 | 显示全部楼层
<p>多谢一得兄赐评!</p><p>拙作已做了一点改动,但“斷、空”二処,暂没找到更好的词,容我日后再改.</p>
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