水龍吟 與江右諸師友登豐城玉華山, 拈《山鬼》若有人兮披蘿帶荔句意分韻得荔字

剧饮千杯

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皎月

可见得妙于心，真的很不错。

仰斋

很雅致，是一首力作，值得赞赏。渔歌兄所提虽是小问题，却很正确。

诗心云意

好词，学生读后受益匪浅，老师能否用简体字发帖，学生看繁体字有点吃力，呵呵。

鄱湖渔歌

还欠一手,就应该结题了.呵呵

剑川

<p>建议加精.</p>

梅云

骚雅清醇，盘旋劲折，允称合作！孔子曰：“后生可畏”，良非虚语。“歌吹”之“吹”，例读去声，偶有借读平者，终不足为训也。结拍“待明朝，卻下清溪買棹，向江湖逝”，不妨点为“待明朝卻下，清溪買棹，向江湖逝”，稼轩“倩何人、唤取红巾翠袖，揾英雄泪”，不如断为“倩何人唤取，红巾翠袖，揾英雄泪”，坡翁“细看来，不是杨花，点点是，离人泪”句读最歧，断为“细看来不是，杨花点点，是离人泪”似更一气灌注也。又，“尘思”之“思”，古人虽有读平者，然仍以读去声为正，可易为“心”。<br/>

鄱湖渔歌

<p>长调难写,佩服.词并熊社评语学习了.提一点"同欲伴"似应为"欲同伴"中间一字似应为平.</p>

卷葹

精心结撰，观其开首、过片、结拍可知，气力全在此三处。

一得愚生

青衫兄以前似乎也不填词 吃惊不小