歪评同门作业

唐洪光

<p>拟愁妇怨&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 斑点猫</p><p>旧疾何因自主张，来时不与我商量。少亲福薄情犹薄，多苦宵长昼亦长。</p><p>花落尚知归故里，水流无故恋他乡。与君数载音书绝，昨日黄花鬓已苍。</p><p>到也模拟出了怨妇的口气，最喜欢第三联。</p><p>沪上逢龙泉空吟兄&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 青青子佩</p><p>寒意三分减，浦江春雨中。微风添逸兴，清酒话初衷。<br/>文字相知久，心情难免同。匆匆还作别，回首一肩风。</p><p>字里行间透露出了重逢的喜悦以及离别时的点滴惆怅，特别是结句更是令人回味。</p><p>有感&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 木风子</p><p>几度窗梅又暗香，一枝清蕊探斋房。折来书案添顏色，薰就诗心共郁芳。</p><p>清新可人，难得疯师兄也有这样宁静的心态。</p><p></p><p>感怀&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;素心雪儿<br/>自守蜗居做小诗，情怀不必与人知。平生岂为浮名累，耽我心中百万思。</p><p>平时总看师姐写的诗大都是小女儿的情怀，这首却有男儿的气魄。好！<br/>&nbsp;秋游湘江&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 潇湘寻梦<br/>&nbsp;江风拂浪鹭低翔，橘子洲头频举觞。最爱远山枫似火，一轮红日出苍茫。</p><p>一气呵成，豪迈之致，喜欢师弟的这个手法。<br/>初秋&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 绿杨烟外<br/>坐听秋阶秋几重，紫薇枝上是秋风 。自吹叶冷蝉声湿 ，谁惜花飞泥径红 。<br/>凉信初从雁头落 ，物华已向句中穷 。平生最羡山头月 ，不在轮回算计中 。</p><p>最喜欢结句，表达了一种超越红尘的思想。</p><p>街头乞儿&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 皎月<br/>路头倦卧面无神，百结污衫怎蔽身？破钵难招青眼客，长街空过锦衣人。<br/>已无餐饭赊明日，独有西风拭泪痕。天不回春苏冻骨，尘寰何处可安贫？</p><p>最欣赏师妹的这首，是啊！天不回春苏冻骨，尘寰何处可安贫？－－欲哭无泪。。。。。。</p><p><font face="宋体" color="#0000ff" size="3"><strong>夜</strong></font><span lang="EN-US"><strong><font size="3"><font color="#0000ff"><font face="宋体"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;">&nbsp; </span>坐&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 白云飞</font></font></font></strong><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p><strong><font face="宋体" color="#0000ff" size="3"></font></strong></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">秋风入夜渐生寒，独枕无眠思万端。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">浮客十年乡梦老，稚儿半宿泪痕残。<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<p></p></span></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">逢迎处世挤青眼，谨慎从人赊素餐。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">日夕忙乎多忘事，前程莫问自心宽。<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<p></p><p>师弟水平大为提高，这首已有师父的路子，特别是结句，望师弟继续努力。<br/></p></span></span></p><p></p><p>师弟水平大为提高，这首已有师父的路子，特别是结句，望师弟继续努力。<br/></p><p></p><p></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">早春</span></b><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">——</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">风儿</span></b><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><br/></span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">一夜东风穿万户，春来何处最先知。</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">檐前紫燕堤边柳，未待花开已入诗。</span></b><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">以寻常之言语表达了深刻之含义，大有――春江水暖鸭先知――之妙。</span></b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">风筝</span></b><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">——</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">小小</span></b><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><br/></span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">常羡苍鹰翔九天</span></b><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">,</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">今朝遂愿舞翩跹</span></b><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">.</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">凌云更欲随心去</span></b><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">,</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">无奈回头一线牵</span></b><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">.<p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan;"><b><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">或许这是小师姐自己的写照，佩服小师姐对事物的观察能力，用心去写，才能得此佳作。</span></b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p><br/></p><p></p><br/><br/><br/><br/><br/><br/><br/>