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发表于 2008-3-21 17:34:45 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
<p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman';"></span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">霁夜荒村寂,春山淡月闲。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">星垂缥缈处,人在有无间。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">露下兰风嫋,空庭苔影斑。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">泠泉未洗耳,云外响灵顽。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p></span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span>
发表于 2008-3-21 19:41:35 | 显示全部楼层
远 缥缈 邈 殊近
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发表于 2008-3-21 21:23:49 | 显示全部楼层
<p>奇静,可听针尖声~~</p>
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 楼主| 发表于 2008-3-21 22:36:33 | 显示全部楼层
先谢二兄,接受意见,改几字,
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发表于 2008-3-21 22:47:32 | 显示全部楼层
<p>感觉有些空泛。三联弱。</p>
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发表于 2008-3-22 08:50:17 | 显示全部楼层
空灵!然,除末尾一句响了一声雷外,整个似乎更类秋山而非春山!春山是热闹为主,如视觉之红绿,如听觉悟之鸟语,如雷鸣!
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 楼主| 发表于 2008-3-22 12:01:06 | 显示全部楼层
<p>再谢哈,,,山字有犯韵,再改下,</p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">寂寂春山夜,村荒淡月闲。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">星垂缥缈处,人在有无间。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">露下兰风嫋,空庭竹影斑。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">泠泉未洗耳,云外响灵顽。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p>
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