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萩荻

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><font size="3"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">其一</span></font></p><font size="3"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">久謫人間天上星</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">野林深處化精靈</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">終宵幽徑提燈候</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">遊子夜歸行莫停</span><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"></p></span></font><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><font size="3"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"></span></font></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><font size="3"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">其二</span></font></p><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black;"><p></p></span><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">天星謫世守三更</span><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">餐露凌虛自有情</span><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">燃腹示君誠可表</span><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="3">欲教肝膽照分明</font></span><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></p><p></p>

一得愚生

其一更好

梅岭野人

<p>二首末句挺好，这首应该都围绕这句做文章。</p><p>岂是微光向人炫，欲教肝胆照分明。</p><p>前两句荻荻再试酌。</p><br/>

剑尘

<p>是初学吧？从境界上看，更喜其二。</p>

萩荻

<p>謝野大哥及梅岭野人詞長賜教!</p><p></p><p></p>[em23][em23]

萩荻

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>剑尘</i>在2008-8-10 0:19:25的发言：</b><br/><p>是初学吧？从境界上看，更喜其二。</p></div><p></p><p>回版版:</p><p>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 習詩已四年,卻因工作及雜事而怠惰疏耕,慚愧之至!</p><p>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 謝謝賜教,請儘管砸無妨.</p><p>&nbsp;</p>[em23]